Matt Bellamy

I really like this. I think the theme you have running through it - things being gone by morning, and I like the way you managed to express this in ...

In general, I liked the concept of this poem. However, I found it a little hard to read in places, simply because of the length of some of the lines. ...

Very cute! I think it would look nicer if there were some capitalization, though. And I don't like that it dies, I would prefer it if it perhaps, rested on ...

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This was pretty good. A few things though: First you say you taste blood, and that he has hit your cheek, but then you say "he won't, he can't" as ...

I didn't find it confusing at all. However, it is a little cliché in places. I think you should add a little more to it to make it more personal ...

This sounds angry, and, while I know it sounds angry, it doesn't make me feel angry too, and really good poetry should do that. Your line breaks are strange, especially ...

I have never critiqued lyrics before. I used to write them, when I was all teen angsty at fourteen, and they were very, very bad! But I'll do my best ...

This is hard to critique! xD I like the shortness of the first line, setting the scene for the rest of the poem. Perched in the air...kind of makes me ...

I was once a follower Who just wanted to fit in A fool caught up with everyone’s thoughts A tiny change, but I'd put a full stop at the end ...

"Friction loses its mighty grip, as gravity drags me down to bitter ice." ^^ This stanza made me smile. I don't know if you wanted it to be amusing, but ...

Hmm. I do like the theme of this poem; that throughout you are describing everything that is wrong, and then the last line that turns it around. However, just by ...

Just gonna go through this line by line: Where will you go, When it gets too much to bear? And I will try to meet you there.

I liked the similes you used, but it seemed a little...unfinished. I was waiting for one more line, to rhyme with your last one, to just kind of round it ...

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